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PostSubject: Bad Times   Mon 17 Mar - 18:20

This was my first ever story. It's not very long but many have said it was good even though I don't think so >_>

SO, here it is



Bad Times

Ch. 1

Zzz... I felt a nudge.

"Wake up my little baby boy" that familiar voice said. I tried to stay awake but I nodded off falling back asleep. Then I felt a violent shake as if an earthquake was happening. The familiar voice screamed

"Get up baby boy!"

I instantly woke up. I couldn't remember where I was and was trying to remember by looking around. As I sat up I could feel that majestic comfort of diapers as well as the warmth of a footed sleeper all over me. I tried to talk but I only felt a pacifier shoved in my mouth. I tried to spit it out but it didn't work. I felt around the back of my head. The pacifier was taped in my mouth. I rubbed my eyes looking around as my vision cleared.

"Aww... Your so cute the way you don't know what's going on." he said smiling.

I turned my head quickly to see a man. He was certainly taller than me. Around 6 foot by my guess. He had raggedy hair at medium length. His eyes were dark brown just like his hair but his skin was pale and he was wearing a jogging suit. Then I saw him open the top to the crib I was in. He picked me up and sniffed my diaper.

"Well you don't need a change right now. I'll come back and check on you later."

He set me back down in the crib, closed the top, locked it, then walked away. I started to wonder how I got here. I tried to piece together the past but I couldn't. I lay back in the crib trying to relax. I turned over to see my favorite plushie. A 2-foot long Arcanine. As I stared into its eyes I started to remember what happened.



Ch. 2.1


Tick... Tock... Tick... I could hear the sound of that small seconds hand moving its way slowly but surely all the way up to the 12. Tock... Tick... Bzzz!!! My alarm set off just like every other Monday. I hit the snooze button and nearly fell asleep. But then I remember that today wasn't like every other Monday. Today was the 6th of August. My favorite day of this year. Today was my birthday. I looked around my room knowing that I had to have everything today be perfect.

"What a mess" I said to myself. I looked around at the dirty clothes lying on the floor and hanging off my dresser near the laundry basket. Next to me on my bed was my favorite plushie. The 2-foot Arcanine my dad gave me before he left for Iraq. He was lying right next to the pacifier I bought a week ago. That was the first TB item I bought myself. I grabbed them both and threw them in an old backpack where I decided I would hide all of my TB things when I bought my binky. I threw the backpack into my closet. I decided to clean my room so I made my bed, picked up al my clothes, and turned on the T.V. to see if anything good was on. Poke'mon was on. But then I realized that it was the stupid new version.

"Why couldn't they just keep it at the first two seasons.” I said to myself.

I shut the T.V. off grabbed a pair of black shorts, a white-T, and some socks and boxers. I took a second look at my room to make sure everything was perfect and my TB stuff was hidden well enough. I left my room and took a sharp left into the bathroom to take a shower. After I was done I came out drying the rest of my hair. I looked into a mirror as I entered my room.

"sigh... None of my wishes came true. Same old Jordan aren't you." I said talking to my reflection.

I was still 5'1", not muscular or fat, and I had those same eyes. I always wondered why I was the only kid in my family to have hazel eyes. Both of my brothers had dark brown eyes. My youngest brother always makes fun of me.

"Ha Ha, you have girly eyes and your a boy. Ha Ha!"

I don't let it bother me to much though. After all he's only 6. My older brother however, never really makes fun of me, or anyone for that matter. He's always depressed for some reason. I don't really know why he just turned 17 in May, we live in a great big house filled with great stuff, and he has his own car! Well a van really but he still has one.

But none of that mattered to me today. Cause today was my 12th birthday. I was ganna be a pre-teen. And officially a "Teen Baby". I was so happy. I walked over to my nightstand and grabbed the baby lotion sitting on top of it. I blew out the scented candle that was on it and then rubbed lotion on my arms, legs, and face. As I walked down stairs I could here the familiar voice of my mother. Her voice was very high pitched for some reason but you get used to it.

"Happy Birthday sweetie! My boy is a pre-teen now! But you know that since you 12 now you have to be more responsible right?"

"Yea mom I know." I moaned.

I could smell the heavenly scent of her homemade pancakes. She put 3 on a plate with some strawberries and set it next to the tall glass of O.J. in my spot at the table. I ate it all in about 30 min because I wanted to go watch T.V. I got up and handed my mom the dishes and walked back up the stairs to my room. On the way up the stairs my little brother screamed at me for getting in the shower first. I just ignored him because he always makes reasons just so he can annoy me. I went in my room and turned on the T.V. Nothing good was on so I just turned on my Game cube. I turned on a Poke'mon game that I was playing the day before. I just played that until it was time for the party.



Ch. 2.2

"Come down stairs Jordan! Your friends want to see you! And we're about to leave so hurry up!"

"Coming Mom!"

I quickly saved my game, turned it off, and ran downstairs. I saw all my friends there. I only have a few friends because most of the kids at school make fun of me for liking Poke'mon. But I had enough friends. I never wanted to be one of those really popular kids. I looked around for the person I wanted to see the most. She wasn't there though.

"Where’s Jasmine?" I asked

"Oh she's not here yet she should be here soon."

Most of my friends were snickering in the background. Everyone knew I liked her. It was no secret. Then the doorbell rang. I ran to the door to answer it. I opened the door to see her. The girl I had a crush on since last year. She was so beautiful, long dark brown hair, light skin but not pale, and the cutest little smile you ever saw. As I was staring into her green eyes she said

"Oh hi Jordan. Umm am I late?"

"No your just on time Jasmine."

"I brought you a present. I think you'll like it."

"Thanks just give it to Greg my older brother."

She walked in and handed Greg the present as I closed the door. She walked over and sat right next to Craig. Craig is my best friend. He was the first friend I had in my school. He was the only person that didn't make fun of me. He introduced me to some of his friends and that's how I got to have so many friends. He's really cool.

"1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6. Okay that's everybody let's get going!" my mom said.

My mom and Greg packed everything in their vans and we separated. We drove down the road took a right then a left and drove down Carolina Dr. When we got to the end where the beach was we took a left and got on a highway.

"Hey J. Is this ganna be fun? I never played laser tag before." Craig asked.

"Of course it's ganna be fun Craig. Laser Tag is so cool!"

"Cool I can't wait till we get there!"

When we got there we unpacked and got everything set up and organized. Me and all my friends walked up to the counter and asked how to get started. He escorted us into this big room with all the laser guns and armor to put on. We put everything on and he explained the rules and how to play. At the end of all that he opened a big sliding door to a huge place. It had metal ladders and mirrors. But it was dark and there were only a few neon lights on the walls to see. Our armor and guns must have been glow in the dark too because they were glowing bright green. We all separated and started to play. I ran up the stairs to be a sniper. The first person I got was Craig. I laughed as I ran to get another spot. Buum Buum Buum my armor made that sound. Jasmine shot me in the back! I ran away for cover and reset my armor by tapping my gun against it just like the instructor said.
This went on for about an hour us just shooting back at each other.

After a few rounds of laser tag we exited and went back to my party room. All my friends gathered around me and my cake and sang the happy birthday song. But of course my little brother had to be stupid and say something.

"Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday to you! You smell like a monkey! And you look like one too!" He shouted

Smack! Right in the back of the head my mom slapped him.

"Stop being mean Ryan!"

"Oww... Mooooommm."

"Don't Moan at me. You got that for a reason."

My friends and me snickered in the background. After we ate cake and ice cream it was time for presents. My mom gathered everyone around me. She handed me her present first. I opened it to find a new game for my game cube. Mario Party 8. I set it aside as she handed me Greg's present. As I opened it I could tell it was another game. He got me Paper Mario 2. I thanked him and continued with Ryan's present. There was a messy card on top. Happy Birthday Big Bro. Maybe this year your eyes will turn brown.
I gave him a mean look and opened the present. A holder for the games I got. Next was Craig's present. I could already tell what it was by it's shape. He got me a football. It was a really nice one and I thanked him for it. I opened the rest of the presents. A new board game, a new backpack, a Poke'mon movie, and a game boy. I reached for Jasmine's present. I couldn't wait to see what it was. I opened it and found a small stuffed growlithe. it had a little note attached to it. I know you like me J. I like you too. Hope you have a great birthday. XOXO. When I looked up she was in front of me and gave me a kiss on the cheek. I must have blushed a lot more than I thought I had because everyone was giggling. I got up and hugged her not letting go of the present.

"Thanks. I really like it."

" I knew you would."

After that we packed everything up and got everyone in the two vans. We dropped everyone off at there houses and then went back home. I took all my presents up to my room and then shut my door. I looked at the note again attached to the Growlithe Jasmine gave me. *I know you like me. I like you too.* I read that over and over again. I could feel myself blushing. I laid down on my bed with the Growlithe on top of me.

"What a great day. Everything went well." I said to myself.

I had a grim feeling. I got up and looked out my window. I felt a chill down my spine as I saw those same black binoculars staring into my window. They appeared there ever since the day I bought my pacifier. I shut my shades and fell down on my bed.

"Who could be watching me. Maybe I should tell someone."

I got up and shut my shades. I walked over to my closet and grabbed the backpack where I kept my TB stuff. I pulled out Arcanine and my pacifier. I locked my door and then shut off the lights. I got under my covers and hugged Arcanine and Growlithe tight. Right as I was falling asleep my mom called me.

"Jordan there's a phone call for you!"

"Ugh... Alright mom coming!"

I put everything under my bed and then walked downstairs. My mom handed the phone to me and then walked away.

"Hello? Who is this?"

"I know your secret." a mysterious voice said

"What are you talking about?" I said blushing

"I know that your a TB. And if you want any *help* with it then you will come to the shack on the beach at the end of Carolina Dr."

"Who are you? And why would you want me to come there"

"I just want to help you out with the TB experience. Call it a favor"

"I'll think about it. This is very suspicious to me."

"Remember you can't tell anyone or our secret will be exposed."

He hung up after saying that. I went into the living room and handed my mom the phone.

"Who was it sweetie?"

"Just a friend wanting me to meet him tomorrow."

"Alright, well good night sweetie."

"'Night mom"

I walked back up the stairs and into my room, Shut and locked the door, grabbed Arcanine and Growlithe, put my pacifier in my mouth and laid down. Finally I could rest after this Bad day.



Ch. 2.3

I woke up and rubbed my eyes. To my surprise my pacifier stayed in my mouth. I laid there in my bed just relaxing and hugging Arcanine. Then to ruin everything Ryan came by my door. BANG BANG BANG!!!

"Get up Jordan it's 11 o' clock!"

"Shut up Ryan go away!"

"Mom said get up so do it!"

Ugh... I got up slowly and yawned. I put Arcanine, Growlithe, and my pacifier in the backpack and threw it in the closet. I made my bed then left my room. I walked downstairs and made a bowl of cereal. I remembered the guy on the phone last night. I decided I should go just to check it out. I ran upstairs and grabbed some clothes and took a shower. I got came out and grabbed my shoes. I decided to take Arcanine with me so I grabbed the old backpack and told my mom I was going out.

"Mom I'm ganna go meet up with my friend now okay!"

"Alright honey, just be back before dinner!"

I went out the front door and started to walk. I made a right then a left. And turned onto Carolina Dr. I walked all the down to the beach. I looked around for the shack he was talking about. I saw it and walked up to it.

It smelled horrible like rotting wood. It looked horrible too. Like a haunted house. I walked to the door and knocked three times.

"who is it?" I heard the familiar voice.

"Umm... It's me. Widdle Baby Jordy!" I said in a babyish voice.

The door burst open and a something really big jumped on me! I felt a damp cloth on top of my mouth and nose. As I gasped for air I could feel myself getting dizzy. I passed out.
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Mon 17 Mar - 18:21

Ch. 3

The opening of a door awoke me from my memories.

"So that's how I got here. How could I have been so stupid! I should have never came." I thought

I tried to escape from the crib but it was locked. I hated being there but to tell the truth it felt so good. Being in a diaper, wearing a footed sleeper, with a binky in my mouth, hugging Arcanine, and in a big crib. The bad thing is that I wasn't home and I was being held hostage by a man I didn't know. I was so oblivious to everything right now. I didn't know what time it was or how to get out of this crib. I started to feel me wetting myself.

"Uh oh! Looks like somebody wet themselves. My little baby boy is gonna need a change now isn't he?" he mocked me in that babyish tone.

I stared at him filled with hatred and it seemed like he could tell because he made a mad face right back at me. He put down a plastic bag. I couldn't see what was in it because it was black but it didn't look very heavy. He unlocked the crib and picked me up. He laid me down, unzipped my sleeper, and took off my diaper. He cleaned me and then re-diapered me, put me back in my sleeper and then in the crib. Before he locked it he emptied the bag into the crib. Lots of plushies of different types of poke'mon and rattles came falling out.

"Daddy went shopping for you. I hope you like these toys." he said smiling as he shut the crib and locked it.

I just stared back at him wishing I could say something. If only this pacifier wasn't stuck in my mouth.

"Aw don't act like you having a bad time. You know you love this."

I took my gaze away from him and looked at all the plushies. I hated to do it but I crawled over to them and started playing with them. There were so many of them too. I loved it even though I hated to admit it in front of him I really did.

"Now that's a good baby boy! Here watch this while I got fix up something to eat. It's almost 6 o' clock. I'm sure your very hungry."

"Oh s***! 6 o'clock I have to get out of here!" I thought.

He put a Poke'mon tape in the T.V. that was in front of my crib. I tried to look away but it was my favorite show. No, I had to devise a plan to escape. I decided that when he went to feed me I would kick him in his privates and then run for the door. It took me so long to come up with the plan because I kept glancing up at the T.V. to watch Poke'mon.

"Baby Jordy! daddy's got some food for you."

He unlocked the crib and picked me up. He brought me over in a smaller room with a high chair in it. He grabbed a plate full of mashed potatoes and a little plastic baby spoon. Then he pulled the tape off and took the pacifier out of my mouth.

"Okay Baby Jordy! Open up for the airplane! Swoom Swoom!"

I hated that. Even deep down low in my TB side that pissed me off. I opened my mouth anyway and gulped it down.

"That's my baby boy! Now open up for the train! Choo Choo!"

"F*** y..."

I didn't even get to finish my sentence. He shoved the mashed potatoes in my mouth. I gulped that bite down too.

"No talking while you eat. Okay here comes another one!"

This time he hit the side of my mouth and spilled it all over me.

"Uh Oh! looks like someone needs a bib. I'll be right back stay there little baby."

I tried to get out of the high chair but I couldn't reach the lever that took off the top. I just squirmed around trying to get out but with no avail. He came back into the room with a bib that had ABC blocks on it. He tied it around my neck and then sat back down to feed me.

"Okay here it comes! Uh Oh! Your a very messy baby aren't you widdle Jordy."

That time I knew he did it on purpose. It pissed me off to be fed by this stranger. I was so mad.

"Alright you had enough let's go."



Ch. 4.1

"Come on baby jordy you need a bath."

He picked me up and brought me over to a tub. There was nothing else there just a tub filled with water and bubbles. He set me down next to it and tried to take off my clothes.

"What are you doing?"

"Baby's can't take baths by themselves. I have to help you."

"That's sick don't touch me!"

I tried to run but he caught me and pinned me down on the ground. He held me down with one arm and undressed me with the other. He picked me up and set me in the tub.

"Now don't you squirm or you'll splash water all over the place."

I did as he said because after this I was going to try and escape after this. He turned me around and started to scrub my back off with a sponge. I started to blush because I hadn't been given a bath by someone else since I was 4. He scrubbed my back off and then washed my hair. He did it with a baby shampoo that doesn't hurt your eyes if it gets in it. I thought that was a great idea because I've gotten soap and shampoo in my eyes a lot. After he finished giving me a bath he picked me up and dried me off. Then he re-diapered me and put my sleeper back on.

"There we go. All clean."

That's when I tried it. I kicked him in his privates and ran for the door. He knelt down in pain as I ran.

"Wait Baby Jordy. Your forgetting something."

He limped over to the crib he put me in before and picked up Arcanine. How could I forget about that. I can't believe it. He was just holding it then he put both hands on it and acted like he was going to rip him.

"Now if you don't come back here and be a good baby boy, I'm going to rip your little stuffed animal in half."

Splash. Splash. My tear drops hit the floor as I walked back slowly. I couldn't leave Arcanine behind. As I took baby steps back to him I put my arms up to grab Arcanine. He gave it to me then as quick as lighting bent me over and spanked me. It didn't hurt that much because of the diaper but it still hurt a little. Splash. Splash. More tears of mine started to fall to the floor.

"Now you have to be a good baby. Don't try to run away. Your my baby boy now and forever."

He put the pacifier back in my mouth and taped it around my head. He set me back in the crib with Arcanine and put in a new tape. He closed the top to the crib and locked it. I was stuck yet again. I started to cry more. My tears falling onto Arcanine's mane. Was I ever going to get out of here? Or will this time never end? Would I have to deal with this bad time forever?



Ch. 4.2

I awoke to the sound of "Return Charmander!" I was still in the crib with the poke'mon tape on. The man was sleeping in some other room. I could tell by the sound of his loud snoring. I decided to try and escape yet again. Maybe I could get out while he was sleeping. Or maybe grab the key to the crib so I could escape without a fight. But how would I get home. In what I'm wearing there would be no way I could get home without a big fuss. But that's probably never going to happen as I was sure I was gone past dinner time. My mom must be worried sick about me. I should have told her where I was going. The snoring stopped. I heard heavy footsteps getting nearer to me.

"Morning Baby Jordy. Do you need a change?"

I nodded my head. He unlocked the crib and picked me up setting me on the changing table. Did the usual routine and set me back in the crib. He then closed the top like many times before and locked it. I sat there wondering what to do. I decided to act exactly like a baby so that he would put his defenses down and I could sneak the key or just run out. I heard the sizzling of a pan.

"Hey Jordy! You want some eggs?"

He looked over at me and I shook my head violently up and down. He laughed and then got backed to cooking. I just watched Poke'mon while I waited for him. Finally, he came back in the room and unlocked the crib. I raised my arms and bounced up and down.

"Oh looks like Baby Jordy accepted his new daddy! Ok let's go baby boy."

I started to whine and put one arm out towards Arcanine. He came back and handed me Arcanine. As he carried me over to the high chair I started to bounce up and down again. Just to make him happy and careless.

"Calm down Jordy. You'll get your food soon."

He put me in the high chair and snapped it in. He brought over a huge plate of scrambled eggs and a bottle of milk. He undid the pacifier and started to feed me. I ate it like a good little boy.

"That's a good boy Jordy. Now drink you milk."

Yuck! Eggs and cold milk. The mixed tastes were gross. But I acted like I liked it and drank the whole bottle of milk. He picked me up and burped me. To my surprise I actually burped a few times. He sat me down near the T.V. and went outta the room. He came back almost instantly with a folded up fence. He undid it and circled it around me. Like it would hold me inside it but I just played with Arcanine and watched Poke'mon until he left.

"I'll be right back Jordy just wait here."

Time for an escape. I played with Arcanine for a few more minutes before actually trying. I crawled over to the edge of the fence to see if he was around. I got up and jumped the fence. Thump! Dangit I made to much noise. I ran for the door. He came around a corner and grabbed the sleeve of my sleeper.

"Your not going anywhere!"

"Yea I am!"

I pulled hard enough for the sleeper to rip. I hit the door and then opened it. As I ran out I could feel the warmth of the sun and the smell of ocean breeze. I ran away from the shack as fast as I could. People were pointing and laughing at me as I ran off the beach. I was used to this at school but even some adults were laughing at me. Drip... Tears started to fall from my face as I ran as fast as I could off the beach and onto Carolina Dr. I slowed down to a walk and turned around to see if he was following me. I turned back around.

"Got you!"



Ch. 5
I screamed and shook violently as the grip of someone unknown held me.

"Calm down kid. We've been looking for you for a while."

I looked up and saw a police officer. Relieved I stopped shaking. He released his grip and talked into his walkie talkie thing.

"Hey I found the kid."

"Okay, we'll notify the mother."

"Alright"

"Umm... Kid. What are you wearing?"

"Oh, it's a umm... Sleeper."

"Why are you wearing it?"

I explained to him what happened in the cabin. He seemed very shocked that all this happened. I explained how I escaped and how I got there also. We walked back to my house together. When I went up to my door and rang the doorbell my mom burst out.

"Oh sweetie your home! Where have you been? I've missed you so much."

"Hey mom, I missed you too."

"Where were you!?!" she said changing her tone.

I explained everything that happened. She changed her expressions from anger to sadness to surprised and back to anger again. She then went over to the cop and talked about other things I wasn't even worried about. I ran back into the house to go change. On the way up my little brother saw me.

"Ha Ha you look like a big baby!"

"Shut up you little brat!"

"I'm sorry Jordan."

I was surprised he said sorry. He came up and hugged me. I hugged him back as he cried.

"I really missed you Jordan."

"I missed you too."

He stopped hugging me and wiped his eyes. I continued up to my room. Greg came out his room.

"Hey Jordan."

"Hi Greg."

That was a lot less emotional than I thought that was going to be. He walked down the stairs as I went into my room. Everything was clean. Mom must've cleaned it while I was gone. I went and laid down on my bed, relieved to be home and away from the bad time that man was giving me. I got up and got out some clothes and went to go take a shower. I came out feeling a lot better as if I had washed away all the bad times from the past few days. When I walked downstairs my mom was still talking to the cop. I decided to find out what they were talking about. I crept downstairs and by the front door.

"I want you to find that man! He did horrible things to my son!"

"Miss, we are trying the best we can to find this man. We searched the cabin on the beach and all we found was a crib, changing table, tub, and some other things. But the man that help your son captive wasn't there."

"Well you better search everywhere! I won't have my son kidnapped again!"

I ran back up the stairs as she came back in the house and slammed the front door. But before she could even walk away there was a knock. She opened it to find a reporter. I crept down yet again to get a closer look. It was the man! The guy who held me captive!

"Mom that's the guy!"

"What? This is the man who kidnapped you?"

I nodded my head and she immediately ran for the phone. She dialed 911 as the man fled from our house. I threw my shoes on and chased after him. He wasn't very fast I was able to keep up with him. I could here sirens following us. As they were getting closer the man hoped a fence and went away. I tried to follow him but I couldn't jump over the fence. The sirens stopped behind me.

"He went over the fence go get him!" I told the cop.

"Thanks kid, but you should go back home before you get hurt."

I acted like I was going to walk home but followed the fence that he jumped over until I found the end of it. I saw the man hiding in an ally behind it. He was just kneeling there. As I walked closer to him he looked up.

"How could you do this to me Baby Jordy? I took care of you."

"Your a sick person. I hope you go to jail!"

At that he jumped up and knocked me to the ground. I screamed as loud as I could but he covered my mouth. Sirens were getting closer. He got off of me and ran away. The police car chased him. The last thing I saw was the cops getting out and putting hand cuffs on him. I blacked out after that. I awoke laying in my room.

"Sweetie are you ok?"

My vision started to clear and I could see my mom standing over me.

"Ya I’m ok. What happened?"

"He tried to take you again. Why would you go after him? Especially after what he did to you."

"I just wanted to help catch him."

"Well you don't need to worry about it anymore. They caught him and he's going to prison."

After hearing those relieving words I tried to sit up. I felt the comfort of a diaper.

"Oh yes. Sweetie you started to bed wet. So we got you some diapers to help."

"Mom I don't need these I don't wet the bed."

"Yes you do sweetie but it's ok. The doctor said it was most likely because of the stress you've been going through."

I sighed thinking that there would always be something wrong. Always something bad to overlap the good. Always Bad Times.

THE END
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Mon 17 Mar - 20:05

That was pretty good I just wish you would change the last chapter and continue it lol. tongue
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Wed 19 Mar - 22:46

I'm actually writing a second one to the series. So, once I finish that I'll post it up
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Thu 20 Mar - 9:47

its realy good but it is a bit short and sorta sick in my view but good story non the less even though it has two mistakes in it which was an added word which wouldnt be there and there was a missing r on your so it said you

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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Thu 20 Mar - 21:19

Sorry, about the mistakes. And it was... Meant to be a little sick I guess. Meh, shortness it was really short. Overall bad story I don't really care.
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Sun 23 Mar - 14:20

I like the 'sick' stuff Razz especially hypnosis me afraid Embarassed
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PostSubject: Re: Bad Times   Sun 30 Mar - 20:56

I thought it was really good for a first time story. Keep up the good work. Very Happy
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