I know I’m branching off from my other stories here, but I got this story in my head at work yesterday and wanted to get a start on it at least so I can return to it if I get in a slump. This one won’t be updated nearly as often as I usually do since I’ll be working on Furrther Adventures in Kanto for the most part. Tell me guys if you like or if I should just scrap it.



Nathaniel’s Yoshi Story



Chapter 1

Nathaniel woke up and was surprised at the light that bombarded his eyes. He shut them quickly and wondered if he had gated in his sleep again. He reverted to his Aura Sight and found something odd. His Aura sight was much weaker! He could only see a few strong Auras around him. He slowly opened his eyes and was shocked to see six Yoshies standing around him. They were green, pink, red, blue, light blue, and yellow. Nathaniel rubbed his eyes and looked again. They were still there, so he pinched himself and it hurt. It was then he noticed how small his hand was. He took a look at himself and was utterly surprised to find that he had shrunk considerably. He looked like he couldn’t be older than one or two years old. He looked up again when he heard one of the yoshies walking towards him.



“What a cute little baby guys.” The green one said. “I wonder if its parents are around.”



“I don’t have any parents.” Nathaniel said.



“By the tree!” the green one said. “It speaks! You’re an orphan little guy?”



“Yes.” Nathaniel said. “I was adopted by four people who are brothers to me in all but blood. And don’t call me little guy please, I’m not usually this size. Call me Nathaniel, or Nate if you wish.”



“Call me Cyan.” He said. “You definitely spoke, so I’m not going crazy. If it weren’t for the fact that you speak so well, I’d be inclined to think you were fibbing. You certainly sound older so I believe you when you say you’re not usually this small. I would thus be inclined to believe you when you say you’ve been adopted by someone. So how did you get out here all by yourself?”



Nathaniel shrugged. “I must have used my method of teleportation called gating in my sleep again. Judging by my obvious change in shape, I’d guess I actually gated to another world somehow. Do Pokémon exist on this planet?”



“Pokémon!” the pink one laughed. “Those are just fairy tales. They don’t really exist.”



“They do where I come from.” Nathaniel said. “The last thing I remember is getting into bed with my Eevee, Arcanine, Bulbasaur, Charmander and Squirtle.”



“He seems to be telling the truth to me.” The blue one said. “Besides, I’ve never seen or heard of any creature like him. If he says he’s from another world, it stands to reason that Pokémon could exist on that world if creatures like him do when they don’t exist on this one.”



“I suppose your right as usual Azure.” The pink one said. “Sorry about that. My name’s Rose. The red Yoshi over there is Garn. The light blue Yoshi is Sky, and the yellow Yoshi is Sunny.”



“Pleased to meet you all.” Nathaniel said. “This is kind of awkward asking but I have a physical need for diapers, could you guys get me some?”



“Okay!” Rose said excitedly.



“Rose, he’s not some doll to play with.” Sky said sternly.



“Could you just go home and get some by gating?” Garn said.



“NOOO!” Sunny said. “We just met him! I don’t want him to leave yet!”



Nathaniel was touched that they liked him already but tried to make a gate anyway. He couldn’t. That’s when it hit him. His Aura Sight was the way it was before he got any other powers! He tried gathering energy but found he couldn’t!



“Uh-oh!” Nathaniel said. How was he going to get home without his power to gate?

This is an intriguing start, but it seemed somewhat choppy. The dialogue was awkward in a lot of places.

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I was adopted by four people who are brothers to me in all but blood

This sentence is awkwardly phrased.

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You definitely spoke, so I’m not going crazy. If it weren’t for the fact that you speak so well, I’d be inclined to think you were fibbing. You certainly sound older so I believe you when you say you’re not usually this small. I would thus be inclined to believe you when you say you’ve been adopted by someone. So how did you get out here all by yourself?”

Do all yoshis speak so formally in this world?

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“I must have used my method of teleportation called gating in my sleep again. Judging by my obvious change in shape, I’d guess I actually gated to another world somehow.

This really seems awkward. Why wouldn't he just say that he must have teleported? This seems to be overly specific. Especially since in the first paragraph of this story you use the word "gated" as though you assume readers should be able to understand it. Using teleportation and gating in the same sentence seems somewhat repetitive. It almost like saying "I ran in a style known as jogging to my friend's house".


As I said before, this is an interesting start. I think that if you can just clean up a few places where the flow is disturbed, this story will be pretty good.

I guess I should have included in the Author's note before the story started that this is the same Nathaniel from my other two stories. I'll remember from now on to state before hand whether they may want to read A Tail of Five Brothers or not. He said he used a form of teleportation called gating because he knows of so many forms of teleportation. Mentioned in A Tail of Five Brothers were a few. Orbing, Shimmering, and Blinking. Plus a spell was also mentioned. I've heard to many people calling yoshies stupid in my school so I made them a bit more articulate in this story. Just put up with me on those regards please. Thanks for the input!

I liked the dream. Im just wondering what happened next? And I understud every bit of it. Keep up the good work.

I also understood easly and so far fairly good. No offense but until I read more and probably even afterwards the pokemon world is still better.

This is a pretty good start but I still think your pokemon is best for now. Keep up the good work though I enjoy you're writing.

Sorry add something about a different story here but....

Spoiler:

rilou wrote: Nathaniel smirked and got a cruel prank in his mind. He picked up the still slumbering Anthony and set him belly up on the changing table. He took out the oil again and massaged him the same way he’d massaged Charmander and Squirtle and Anthony woke up. His eyes immediately rolled in bliss and when Nathaniel finished he made a few motions. “Wait a minute!” Anthony shouted as he quickly rolled over. He looked at himself but didn’t find the diaper he was expecting. Nathaniel and the starters broke into helpless fits of laughter and Anthony scowled at them. “Not funny guys.” He said. “Fine! If you’re so determined to get me to try a diaper, put one on me.” Anthony laid back down with a huff. Nathaniel was surprised but wasted no time in diapering Anthony. He didn’t know when another opportunity like this would show up! Fortunately Bulbasaur’s diapers were equipped with a tail hole that could be opened if needed. Nathaniel had to bite his tongue to keep from laughing at how cute Anthony was. An Eevee his age in diapers would be cute enough, but he was even cuter with that angry look on his face. Nathaniel pulled out something he had bought at the pokemart for just such an occasion. He pulled a pair of plastic pants up over Anthony’s diaper and then attached the removable locks. That was when Anthony leaped back to his feet. “What are you doing?” He shouted. “I thought you were going to let me out of these after getting a good laugh in. Let me out of these!” “I’ll make you a deal Anthony.” Nathaniel said when he had control of himself again. “If you wear them for the day and can honestly tell me that you didn’t like them, I’ll take them off you and I won’t make you wear them again. Deal?” “Fine!” Anthony huffed. Nathaniel smirked. He’d scored on that one. He could see something Anthony couldn’t. Anthony was too angry right now to realize it, but Nathaniel could tell by his Aura that he did indeed like diapers

The, CUTEST, FUNNIEST, MOST EPIC SCENE. I love it this is just brilliant.

Thanks guys! I'll be sticking with the pokemon stories for now. This story is mainly if I come to a road block while writing the pokemon story.

[blind praise][/blind praise]

Here's the next chapter guys!


Chapter 2



“That sounds allot like magic to me.” Cyan said after Nathaniel explained his situation to him. “I’ve only heard of Koopas and Wizards using magic before. My dad might know something about magic though. We could take you to him. We should anyway to see what’s to be done about you. We can’t leave an infant alone.”



Nathaniel, despite feeling frustrated at being called an infant, felt a surge of hope. Maybe Cyan’s father could tell him what’s happened to him, or point him in the direction of someone who does.



“First thing’s first though.” Sunny said. “We need to get him in a diaper like he asked.”



“I’ll go get some.” Rose said. “We’re not to far away from the village so I can rush over to grab some for him.”



Rose dashed off and was back a few minutes later with more than just a pack of diapers. She also had a basket of fruit with her.



“I got some fruit as well in case anyone was hungry.” Rose said. Everyone laughed when Nathaniel’s stomach growled in confirmation. Sunny and Rose gently laid him down upon his back and proceeded to diaper him. Nathaniel looked at the diaper with a bit of doubt. It looked a bit small for him. Then he remembered his current size and it looked like it would work. When Rose and Sunny were done diapering him, he had to admire how snug and comfortable it was.



“Anyone else want one?” Sunny asked looking at the others.



“No thanks.” The four others answered quickly.



“When she asked if anyone else wanted one, she meant get your tails over here so she could diaper the rest of you.” Rose said with an edge in her voice.



“Aren’t they a bit small for them?” Nathaniel asked.



“These are those one size fits all diapers.” Sunny said. “They’ll stretch enough to fit them. Those diapers are actually a bit big for you. We almost had to overlap the tapes.”



Nathaniel checked the diaper again and found the ends of the tapes just touching. He also noted how the top of the diaper came just about a quarter of the way up his stomach.



Nathaniel smiled at the yoshies when he got an idea. “I’m sure they wouldn’t mind being diapered so much if a certain two yoshies were diapered also.”



“That’s right.” Sky said slyly.



“I’ll bet we could make it happen if we tried.” Garn said.



“Oh all right!” Sunny said. “I’ll wear diapers if I can diaper two of you.”



“Same here.” Rose said rolling her eyes.



Cyan sighed and walked over to Rose with Garn. Azure and Sky walked over to Sunny and all four of the other yoshies laid down in front of the girls. The girls made quick work of diapering them and laid down for the boys to diaper them. It was over quickly and Nathaniel smiled at how cute they looked. That’s when he realized just how young they looked as well. They couldn’t be much older than yoshi kids.



“So are you guys almost adult yoshies or are you yoshi kids?” Nathaniel asked to be sure.



“We’re not yoshi kids anymore, even though we have the tendency to dress like this often.” Azure said.



“AZURE!” Rose, Sunny, Garn and Sky yelled at the same time.



“We’re always trying to get each other in diapers some way or another.” Cyan whispered to Nathaniel. “Everyone makes a fuss about it when they are tricked, convinced, etc. into wearing them, but the truth is we all like wearing them.”



“I do too.” Nathaniel said. “So you guys are almost adult yoshies then?”



“We are just about ready to take our rite of passage into adulthood.” Cyan said. “We just have to wait for our friends Nite and Star to get back so we can make our pilgrimage to the Tree to eat the fruit that will begin our final growth into adults. We could stay like this if we really wanted since we can have eggs. We just form a group that has the potential to grow into stronger yoshies and live in a special valley of these super yoshies. It is said that in that valley is an entire grove of Super Happy Trees. While the village we live in is nice, it isn’t the paradise the valley is. We can one day leave that valley and return to our village to protect it as the elders of the village.”



“Sounds pretty cool.” Nathaniel said. “How about we eat and then see your father about me?”



The yoshies agreed and they chowed down. Cyan was munching down on a watermelon, while the two blue yoshies gulped down grapes. Sunny was eating a bunch of bananas while Rose and Garn ate a giant apple each. Nathaniel held onto a melon of some kind and wondered how he was going to eat the thing.



“Oh, here. Let me help you.” Cyan said. He took Nathaniel’s melon and smacked it on a rock before handing it back to Nathaniel in two halves. Nathaniel enjoyed the juicy fruit and surprised himself when he finished the whole thing. When they’d finished eating Cyan picked Nathaniel up and set him on his tail. Nathaniel found he could easily sit where he was and had a good hold. It was an even more secure perch than when he rode on Arcanine! The six yoshies then ran off towards the village with a very hopeful Nathaniel.

Finished editing these two so here they are as well!


Chapter 3



Nathaniel knew he was getting some odd looks as the six ran through the village. He could somehow tell he was the one getting the attention and not the six diapered yoshi. He guessed that they were seen in diapers pretty often because of this. They reached a hut in the center of town and Nathaniel saw a fat old yoshi sitting on a bench talking to the biggest yoshi he could imagine. The black yoshi that he saw was easily ten feet tall and possibly then some. He had some funny red paint coming from below one of his eyes in the shape of a thunderbolt. He also held a spear that looked like a small tree. Nathaniel didn’t even want to guess what bird he got the feather that was sticking up from the back of his head from.



“You’re dismissed Thunderfoot.” The green yoshi said. The giant yoshi saluted with his spear and walked out of the hut.



“Look at what we found papa!” Cyan said excitedly with a young voice as he held Nathaniel towards the old yoshi.



“Odd looking child.” The green yoshi said after sniffing him. “You didn’t force put him in your mouth to find out what he was did you?”



“No way.” Cyan said. “We haven’t done that since we were yoshi kids.”



“That’s probably because you stuck so much in your mouth that you knew pretty much what everything was by the time you weren’t yoshi kids.” Cyan’s father said chuckling. “You’d better find this babe’s parents before they attack the village. If this child were older, he looks like he’d be pretty fierce.”



“My guardians are back on my home world.” Nathaniel said.



“By the tree, it speaks!” Cyan’s father said amazed. “And so articulately as well! So you’re from another world. Sounds like magic to me. I’ve only ever met one wizard who knew more than the existence of other worlds. He lives in the valley that I hope Cyan and his friends will reach soon. I may have a greatly expanded life span, but I won’t live forever to guard the village. And the Thunderfoot can only protect against so much.”



“Thanks.” Nathaniel said. “I was hoping you could tell me something that might get me home. Maybe when they leave on their pilgrimage they can bring me with to meet this wizard you spoke of. He might be able to help me get home!”



“I actually was about to call on the six of them.” Cyan’s father said. “I’d like for the six of you to leave now. The Thunderfoot brought word from Nite and Star. They’re stuck in two places and could use your help. They are actually on the way if you go by the correct route. I’ll give you a map to guide you so you can get the two of them and still get to the Happy Tree to complete your rite of passage.”



“Okay then.” Cyan said. “We can still bring Nathaniel though right?”



“If you think you can take care of him on your journey then yes.” His father answered.



“Then we’ll pack some diapers and extra fruit for the journey.” Cyan said.



“We’ll be back to join you as soon as we can Uncle Green.” Sunny said hugging the old yoshi. Everyone else gave him a hug and they left the hut with the map he gave them.



Chapter 4



They rushed to a shop before leaving the village and grabbed several packs. Each yoshi had one and they grabbed more packages of diapers than he thought they’d need. Then he realized they were packing diapers for all of them. They also grabbed allot of their favorite fruits and several melons for Nathaniel. Nathaniel was surprised by how much the packs held. The yoshies were actually given the stuff for free since they were officially leaving on their journey. There was allot of cheering from the villagers as the six left.



They walked for a long time along the road until they saw some kind of elephant in overalls blocking the path. No matter how hard they tried they couldn’t get past him as there was some kind of force field blocking them from going around it.



“The elephant appears to be the source of the force field.” Nathaniel said using his Aura Sight. “We need to shake him somehow.”



“How are we going to do that without an egg to throw at him?” Sky asked.



“We could do a ground pound.” Azure said.



Garn ran up to the elephant and tried a ground pound, but when nothing happened, the elephant kicked him and Garn laid on the ground in front of Cyan looking dizzy.



“I wouldn’t recommend you do that again.” Rose said.



“Well what should we do?” Sunny asked.



“Let’s do it together.” Cyan said.



Nathaniel clung tight to Cyan as all six of them ran up to the elephant and slammed the ground in front of him and Nathaniel smiled when the elephant flipped over. They flutter jumped over the fallen thing and ran forward again. They stopped soon when they saw a natural enemy of the yoshies.



“Shy Guys!” Nathaniel yelped. There were a dozen of them! The six quickly used their long tongues to snag six of them and Nathaniel was pleased when they swallowed them and created an egg each. Five eggs were launched and six Shy Guys disappeared. The last one ran away and Cyan handed Nathaniel his egg. Nathaniel smiled and took careful aim. The Shy Guy was about thirty feet away when Nathaniel lobbed the egg. Fifty feet away from the yoshies, the egg struck the Shy guy on the head and it too disappeared.



“Nice shot little buddy!” Cyan said.



Nathaniel smiled and they continued down the path until they reached a fork in the road. They checked the map and saw that one way would be the route they’d need to take if they were to go on the journey. The other way led them the way they’d need to go if they were to pick up Nite first. They turned down that path and by the time the sun was setting, they had reached a cave.



“Let’s stop here for the night before entering the spooky cave.” Sunny said.



“We’ll have dinner and change anyone who needs it before we sleep.” Rose said.



Nathaniel looked down at his diaper and was shocked by how wet it was without him realizing it. His diaper was actually sagging over the sides of Cyan’s tail! He checked everyone else and saw that theirs hadn’t sagged nearly as much, despite showing some obvious swelling.



“Our little buddy should be changed first.” Cyan said. “I can feel his diaper halfway down either side of my tail!”



Cyan lifted him off his back and this time the Cyan changed him. Cyan and Sunny then changed each other while Garn and Rose took care of each other, leaving Azure and Sky to handle each other. They passed out a piece of fruit to each other and after they ate, they set a guard schedule. Nathaniel found himself being used as a stuffed animal by Sunny and Rose. He didn’t mind and fell asleep as soon as he closed his eyes.

Author's note: To avoid the question, Thunderfoot will be explained in the next chapter.

this story is pretty good keep up the good work

Next Chapter Up!


Chapter 8



Everyone was tired after fluttering down to the jungle. They set up camp and it was Star and Nite who used him as a plushie this time.



Nathaniel knew he was dreaming this time. He was also sure that someone was looking for him. He tried to call out this time but he still couldn’t find his voice. He saw some blue light heading for him but woke up before it got close enough for him to see what it was.



“You’re soaked again little buddy.” Cyan said.



Sure enough, Nathaniel had a giant water balloon attached to him again. Cyan helped him out of the diaper and tied it shut since it was impossible to roll up. He took Nathaniel down to a small stream before diapering him and set him in the water. Nathaniel murred with pleasure as Cyan began rubbing him all over, washing the dust of the road out of his fur. When he was done with his bath Cyan helped him out of the water and leaped back in surprise when Nathaniel instinctively shook the water out of his fur. They had a chuckle about it and Cyan took Nathaniel back to the camp and put him in a fresh diaper. Nathaniel had a melon for breakfast and then mounted Cyan. Before they left the campsite, Nite hefted Nathaniel’s previous diaper onto the flames and Nathaniel laughed as the diaper immediately popped open and doused the flames.



They walked through the jungle and they came to a weird set of huts. They started walked past them when a bunch of strange creature began throwing things at them. The yoshies ran for it and Nathaniel wondered if this was how Indiana Jones felt when he was chased by the boulder. It was at least the old Mario game when the barrels were lobbed at him from above by Donkey Kong. Eventually the yoshies had enough and split up to work their way closer to the meanies. Nathaniel sprung from Cyan to one of them and found he could lift him. He threw the thing at another and they all ran off when the yoshies each ate one.



They continued walking through the jungle until something happened. Sky was suddenly pulled into a plant when a red tongue came from the plant and snagged him. Nathaniel leaped off of Cyan and tried to slice the stem what he recognized as a particularly nasty species of piranha plant. His claws bounced off the surface, but the plant spat Sky out. The only difference was Sky was tiny! The plant looked at Nathaniel and suddenly grew larger. Fortunately, before it could open its jaws, it was hit by eight eggs at once and the bulb flew clean off the stem and disappeared. Nathaniel sighed in relief and noted when he sat back down on Cyan’s tail his diaper was drooping half way down his tail again.



“We’ll change you when we get out of this jungle little buddy.” Cyan said.



They eventually got out of the jungle and stood on a beach. Cyan changed Nathaniel and then the yoshies did their victory pose with the accompanying music again.

not bad at all pretty good Riolu.

Finished this story over the weekend guys. I'll post it as soon as I can. The ending is kind of cute and I hope you all like it!